GubernatorFan wrote:Well, everything looks corrected, but I was a little confused by the new style of balloons, with the initial words below the ones that follow (yes, I get it, they are closest to the mouth of the speaker, but we expect things to proceed from up to down, even more so than from left to right -- just ask the Ancient Egyptians).
I don't always get it entirely right, but here are some examples:
https://onesixthfigures.forumotion.com/t1076-star-wars-christmas-revised-edition?highlight=star+wars+christmas (the "Thank you, we'll let you know. Next!" part in the first set was consistently in the wrong spot, so that would be an example of what to avoid, although it would have been difficult to put it anywhere else unless one had foreseen the issue before starting the photo shoot in the first place; I did better in the subsequent sets.)
To avoid the issue with the placement and sequence of the balloons, I've also experimented with "excerpts" from a fake script, as in here:
https://onesixthfigures.forumotion.com/t2799-star-wars-the-further-adventures-of-darth-maul-part-i
See if you like it better now.